Monday, February 8, 2010

At Seventeen

He entered the solid concrete road, planting his foot down in hope to catch the mysterious surfer girl that saved his life. Leaving behind a wall of dust his rusty wagon clunked and clattered as it accelerated to speed, eventually catching up to her car. After signaling her to stop they met on the edge of the sun burnt road.
“I thought you wanted to me to leave?” she questioned
“I did,” the youth responded
“Then why are you here?” she said puzzled
“Well,” he said. “The beach is big enough for two.”
She smiled at the youth as they both entered their vehicles. The youth pulled a u-turn in which she followed. They continued along the coastal road as the bright sun began to set.

He entered the solid concrete road, planting his foot down in hope to catch the mysterious surfer girl that saved his life. Leaving behind a wall of dust his rusty wagon clunked and clattered as it accelerated to speed, eventually catching up to her car. After signaling her to stop they met on the edge of the sun burnt road.
“I thought you wanted to me to leave?” she questioned
“I did,” the youth responded
“Then why are you here?” she said puzzled
“Well,” he said. “The beach is big enough for two.”
“You will find someone to share that beach with,” she replied. “But not today.”
She entered her car and continued her journey along the coast. The youth pulled a u-turn back towards his secluded piece of beach. They headed in opposite directions, never to meet again.

2 comments:

  1. You got an account! Good stuff :) I like ending two, "But not today." That's gotta hurt.

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  2. At least he tried in both of the endings. I think they both end reasonably happily though. They both still have the sea at the end of the day. Nice work of changing the two endings.

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